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Literature
my light
lost in a daydream
You invaded my thoughts
for the first time in my life
i was tempted to give up
everything for you
you are
*my sunshine
this fire inside of me burn my soul
i can hardly breath
my tears falling
i need you
let me see into your eyes
give me your light
you are
*my cosmos
to have the chance to look at you
and taste your lips only once
please let me breath again
You are not here
but I can't get you out of my mind
thinking of you
you are
*my world
let me touch you
your soft skin like porcelain
i want to know
the smell of your skin
only once
le me be your passion
you are
*my universe
i am a white page
waiting for you to write o
Literature
look at the mirror and fall in love at first sight
give yourself a flower
and wear your favorite
sweater
sit in a nice, quiet
little coffee shop
and meet yourself
with that first sip
of warmth
and a smile.
in the afternoon,
walk to the nearest park
and hold your hands
together
as if in a prayer
like a lover's dream,
be sweet to yourself
for once.
let the kid with the waffle cone
and his mother
stare at you for 45 seconds
while you feed the birds
hang those insecurities
by the door
or tuck them away
somewhere
in your cabinets
or drawers-
just take them off
today,
pick a hot red dress
and buy yourself
a drink for two
tonight,
mirror at one end
of the table
and your love
at the other.
Literature
A Change In Perception
In this head of mine,
I thought that I was smart.
I thought I understood everything,
but my arrogance tore it apart.
I had to learn from those who cared most,
that things are never what they seem.
And though our anxious minds might think dark thoughts;
We are only ever betrayed within our worst dreams.
In fact, it is the opposite,
for it is I who became the traitor.
I could never have known you were reaching for me,
Because I let my fears become my manipulator.
But I promise you now, I will make this right.
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I had written this last year for one of the contest held at but back then I didn't like it well enough to see it worthy of being submitted after all I had penned it down as a rough draft all the while doodling with the words and all, lol.
And now so many months later, I had the chance to read it again and quite liked it. And hence I am posting it now, mainly because I have always been a bit too shy to share and post my writings. There are just a handful of people here who knows that I am a writer as well, before I ventured into the manipulation stream I used to write but it was always kept a private affair.....you see I am not confident about my writing skills.
So anyone with good knowledge about poetry and stuffs like that, I would love to hear a constructive criticism about this poem, which in my opinion seems to be very flat and plainly written.
Thank you for taking your time reading it, your views, comments, opinions and faves are greatly appreciated.❤️❤️
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I am not a writer....and I am terrible even with simple grammar rules.....although in my opinion I can at least "feel" the sincerity through art..and that feelings for me make DA be a place so special...for make us be connected with feelings we always hide...so deep inside.....
.....even if I feel I don't have the right to be here anymore.....and what I write looks most time just selfish words....I have that "need" to write someting...even if never will be good enough....or never will show exactly what I feel.....
...talking about your poetry I relate even with what you wrote in your description....if you don't want to show your feelings sharing your poetries....I am sure people will respect and understand that....the sincerity in your poetry make it be special for sure..and personal of course..
Some of your digital arts (Photomanipulation) or that poetry looks so special exactly for the feelings we can feel through it......and that connection will be always the same.....doesn't matter the kind of art you decide to put all things you hide deep inside your heart and soul....
Poetries....drawings....digital arts and all kind of arts that we do when we are in pain or trying to understand better ourselves...our feelings.........for me looks like the most precious arts in the world....the kind of rare treasure I most respect and I have found so much here in DA....
You say have always been a bit too shy to share and post your writings.........but you have been sharing your feelings through your art a long time ago here....and for sure would be lovely for your Followers have the honour to read your writings....if you wish to share it here of course...
you have a simple way to write.....and in the same way looks elegant and full of deep feelings...and I relate a lot with the sad meaning I have reading it....
thank you for share that poetry here....and keep in mind everything you do with your feelings never will be better or worst than others....but will be a part of you....and when we have so much going on in our hearts and mind...what you have to write will be always unique and interesting to read for sure....
the romantics will never feel their words good enough to be
pronounced or written.....not only for don't be confident...too shy.......we are most time so flooded with feelings......that we can't accept anything we do will be able to be good enough to describe something so complex we face all days....being so tender and special.....but make us crying in pain most time....
sorry for the long and selfish post...in my way I am just trying to say what you wrote and what you write looks special....and for you don't feel confident to post it....make it be even more special....when talented people like you don't feel confident to post a pretty poetry like that...show how much feelings it has....and how much about you we can feel in it....